From reading out my screenplay to a group of people, I have gained some constructive criticism in order to make my screenplay better.
Someone said that the beginning of my screenplay is humorous and goes well with my story but that humour isn’t present through to the end so I may add more comedy to the rest of my screenplay.
I was told that I need to describe one of my characters more so that everyone gets a feel of what kind of person she is and what she looks like so I will add more description.
In the beginning of the screenplay I have involved a voice that speaks to the girl Emily. I was told that I should add more lines for this voice throughout the screenplay because it makes the story better and more entertaining.
I will add all of these things to my screenplay to make it better and worth a higher grade.
